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新托福写作——短句变长

2019-07-02 供稿单位: 易世教育 原创作者:小编

哲人云:不在写作中恋爱,就在写作中变态。

曾经很多烤鸭们相当困惑,究竟什么样口味的句子才是阅卷官们喜欢的?五香麻辣锅还是香草冰激凌?谜底:在托雅大作文中,终极口味是“具体”,You cannot be more specific. 从单个句子的维度来说,句子越细节,得分越高,但绝不是生搬硬套东拉西扯。所以本次方法的核心就是扩充句子,使其获得由短变长的飞跃。究竟怎样扩充句子呢?有如下方式:

1、增加并列成分
2、增加修饰成分
3、增加从句
4、增加连词

来个句子具体化练习:
They grow long hair.
这个句子没有任何闪光点,我们利用以上方式来修改这句话,变成了如下的句子:
They grow long hair, regardless of the gender, usually part of which is dyed in gold.
这句话就相当璀璨夺目,有修饰成分也有从句(效果果然不是盖的)。

同理,做以下的三个练习:
1. They wear jeans
2. Boys wear earrings
3. Girls smoke

以下为一组多个句子组成的一段话。
1. Energy is much needed now. And nuclear plants are clean and economical. They can produce vast amounts of energy. But people, especially local residents are very concerned about safety. They hold a strong negative attitude toward them.
这几个句子都是简单句,虽然表达的意思很清楚,但是明显没有满足作文阅卷官的口味偏好,下面我们将上述句子搭配成完整的复杂句。合并句子的准则为:同一个词汇可以合并,变成从句或修饰成分,例如“energy”、 “people”。修改后的句子为:
Nuclear plants are a clean and economical way of producing vast amounts of much-needed energy; however people, especially local residents, who are very concerned about safety, hold a strong negative attitude toward them.
同理,做两个练习:
Some people succeed. Other people fail. The difference is not the number of opportunities. It is whether they can take advantage of opportunities. Opportunities will arise in the course of one’s life, though they are rare.
College students now are primarily interested in grades and economic success. They are expected to cheat more frequently. They are unlike those graduated ten years ago. They are only interested in their own personal future and consider little the problem of society.
至此,大家应该基本了解短句变长句的过程,烤鸭们请时刻牢记:Practice makes perfect!and闭门造车埋头猛练必然不够,来易世英语,找名师;指点迷津,不再迷惘;学以致用,内外兼修。

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